Joshsouza's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[shroogy the alien prequil]

Review Request Club

I think this submission could use some improvements and maybe some more animation because number 1, I didn't get anything until I saw the script, and number 2, it was WAY too short so I will start on the review:

ART 4/10

The art was ok I guess but you could work on that shading because it doesn't seem that good. The sky and everything was good but you could put in a bit more details like some trees in the background or he is in some forest or something. I don't know but get creative! Also, please work on the buttons because it is just text that has been converted into a button.

ANIMATION 3/10

The animation wasn't all that great and needs some work but I also thought it was weird that someone else took half of the animation too so I can't give you 100 % credit on that. But try to find more animating techniques
I didn't think the animation was all that great. Also, it was kind of fast-paced like when the meteor crashes, he comes out immediately instead of wondering what the heck happened.

STORY 5/10

So I saw the script and the extras to find something to review about but I stumbled upon some awesome writing and I think SkilledBrush should have gotten more credit! (Wait, skilled brush? I thought he just made a script!) But it was sad that I didn't know what was going on from that animation to script which means it wasn't really following it.

AUDIO 3/10

I really think there should have put more audio in this because I saw this for the first time and I thought that as a good song choice but there was nothing in the middle and the end! There's really no point of putting in music if you are only going to put it in the beginning!

OVERALL 4/10

Like I said, this needs work but why is this under comedy? I found no part funny at all! I hope the series gets better but try to spell right because I can actually get first impressions from that. Just try to make it better and put a little more art into this because this could get a good score if you tried...

-Joshsouza (RRC Signature at top!)

["EXTINCT"]

Review Request Club

I thought the thing was nice but I did get a little boring in between but a really good job with the 3D effects in there. So I start the review.

I thought the art was really good and very cool with the 3D but why was the cat er dog thing in 2D if the rest of the things are 3D? It's kind of weird but I guess it put a little less work so you could get your other projects done but it's fine with me. There was also some other 2D parts that didn't really go along with all of the other art.

The music was pretty good and so was the sound but, it kind of got out of sync when the cat dog thing was running. (What do I call that thing!) It came in at nice times and where you needed them but why didn't you put sound in any other submissions?

The story wasn't that good since it was just an animal just doing his own thing in the forest for about 3 MINUTES and FINALLY, there was something to keep me busy to watch because you didn't need all of that extra things at the beginning. Then finally it ended.

I guess you put a lots of effort into it if you did it all 3D and spiffy and such which is good considering Newgrounds is turning into a stick collection off crap so good job on keeping it cool!

Overall I thought this was one of a kind and one of the only 3D flashes on Newgrounds you can find that would be on Aniboom. Just try to get some of the sound in sync and work harder even though this was good.

-joshsouza

manuelberja responds:

no,the rest are 2d.it's just the piece of tree bark,cage,trap,bamboo,butterfly.
thanks!

[Super Quality Time]

It's Ok

The whole thing was OK but there was some things that needed some improving.

The art was Pretty good for an average flash but the shading in layers kind of got me attention. I think you should use less shades but it would be nice to add a little more color into this because Luigi's head without the hat was just green while Mario's was brown!

The animation wasn't all that great plus the lip syncing was terrible like it looked liked he was something like "aha" when it should of looked like he was saying the "o" sound instead so you should definitely look at that and improve a bit.

My speakers got stolen from my brother for the night so it was a relief to have subtitles but I kind of had to imagine what they sounded like so I can't really review on the audio.

Other than that everything was great but just improve on that and it could be a really cool thing!

(Review Request Club) -Joshsouza

[LARRY episode 1.5]

Nice

I thought the whole thing really cracked me up with all of the jokes you put in and they thought that the Normons were Mormon but are they going to be with Larry in Episode 2?

ART 10/10

The art was really good and I liked the style and how you got every background done with barely any lag even on my crap Acer Laptop. The colors you used were good too and I saw much improvement from the first one and I expect to see Episode 2 even better.

STORY 10/10

I thought the storyline was weird but pretty funny how they had to put up with everybody in the town and how they kept getting mistaken for Mormons instead of people who want directions so very good job on it plus it was good to see a little bit of Larry in it.

ORIGINALITY 10/10

I thought it was very original plus the fact that this is your OWN series and not just some crap about sticks and stuff which is what I see every day here. The characters were original too like the gay guards and the hippie guy who got everybody in the town crazy for them.

EFFORT 10/10

I just know that you put a lot of effort into it plus the fact that it took a couple months to finish and how you said how long it took in the description but I still don't know why I review on effort if you people usually discuss that in the description but oh well

ANIMATION 10/10

The animation was top-notch and great and didn't have any flaws. I like how that one guys slammed the door on the guy's face and yelled no at him.

OVERALL 10/10

I am happy to say that there wasn't any flaws I could think of and I really enjoyed this one and how it was less laggier. I thought the jokes were great and I think you should keep this up. I will be expecting work like this on Episode 2

-Joshsouza

Jazza responds:

wow, big review, you deserve my undevided attention in my response.

well, they wont be a core part of the series, theyre just some characters in the series to get to know, the MAIN ones are in the full episodes, but you will see them and might even learn a little more as to how their story progresses.

thanks man. i got big plans for larry 2 :D

the animation could be better to be honest, i had lots to do in a short amount of time, but episode 2 will have a lot more detailed animation/action for ya. unless i die.

thanks heaps man, i'll do my best. great review. i give YOU a 10.

[Snow Wars]

Worked like a Movie!

I gotta say that the whole thing played like a movie but there was some flaws but not in the flash and video but the quality but that wasn't really your fault and it was pretty good watching it in a distance and using the lower lights button to give you a feel of a movie plus the screen and music in the main menu screen sounded like a movie like how it was all set up. Shane Dawson would never be able to do this.

The acting was very good and I didn't see any flaws or cracks in the voices at all or any mishaps and the animation made a really cool effect but I think you should upload this somewhere or make a DVD out of it so it will give you a feel of what it would be like have a movie you made..

I was deeply saddened by the score just because a couple people don't like "videos" in the flash portal even though you put a lot of flash in it. I think you should e-mail the video without flash or a menu screen and see how THEY would react compared to this finished video. I am sorry I had to write this paragraph because it doesn't seem fair that it got a bad score very unfairly.

It was a good call to put captioning in it because sometimes I couldn't hear what the people were saying ad that really saved me from giving you a 9 on this but try to be a little louder because of the bad quality for the file storage here.

The animation was really good and I was glad to see that the beams weren't just lines in different color but you actually detailed them instead of keeping it noob. Plus the Star wars joke you put near the end and the effect looked really cool and realistic and it was good work.

I thought the whole video was hilarious and the best jokes were when the blind guy got lost and the guy that wasn't dead came back plus his line he said cracked me up. I wont tell the spoiler ones though unless I already did but your sense of humor is strong and you had a nice little place to show it to the NG community or at least 415 right now as I am reviewing this still.

I know that you put a lot of effort into it because you had to spend 4 days just putting flash in! Plus I am sure there were problems recording and acting and a lots of cut-scenes but you actually did it!.

After all of the wait I gotta say that this is the best VIDEO on NG I have seen so far and you guys should keep it up! Overall This is great and the only thing I can say to improve on is the voice to be louder because of sound quality! Good job.

I know you are gonna submit this to RRC so
(Review Request Club)
-Joshsouza

Fro responds:

Thanks a lot for the well thought out review

[the Last of the Dashkin]

Blown Away

I think this is the best flash that has happened this year but I have seen lots of improvement in this and I am here to present you with this ACTUAL review. I was saddened that it was a lot shorter than the last one but here this goes...
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ART 10/10
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The art improved a lot and is the best artwork I have seen for a long time so I give you a very score for that so you get a 10/10 for that and I am hoping to see it the same in the conclusion or even better if it is even possible but still great job!
I think it is better than I can even do in my entire life!
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STORY 10/10
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The story was really good too and I have always wondered where Bitey came from and it ended with a huge cliffhanger to the conclusion which is another good thing about 2 -Part stories on animations or books. It felt like it was an Imaginary "National Geographic" or "Discovery Channel" show which was weird for a Newgrounds animation but it worked so well done.
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EFFORT 10/10
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I know you have spent a lot of time and effort onto it because you said that it took you 4 weeks to make! Also it is so amazing that you HAD to put a lot of effort into this and this score was kind of predictable and you should know that if you or any viewers actually wanted to look at this actual good review.
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ANIMATION 10/10
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I am pretty sure that you saw THIS score coming because the animation was very clear and very fun and entertaining to watch. Did you turn on the Auto Quality thing because I didn't see any quality controls but it lagged a little EVEN on my new computer I got.
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AUDIO 10/10
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The audio was very fitting and did its job at the best part. Plus the fact that you did the audio all by yourself! It was very detailed and made me want to watch the whole thing again and again!
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OVERALL 10/10
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This IS the best flash of the year and the whole thing really shows it plus it was the first submission on Newgrounds to get a 4.80 score! I really can't find anything to improve because your skills are so high that it is hard to find a single thing wrong! Maybe beef up the story a bit and make the conclusion give you second thought but it IS your idea but this is my review on your movie and I really enjoyed it.

-Joshsouza

[MSPaintWhatDoYouWantToBe?]

Meh

I thought it was cool to see all of the images in that thread here but the fact that it was just MS paint and some people made a stick with a larg penis bugged me.

The art was OK but mainly bad since people with no art skills were in this Collab.

I don't think you put much effort into this if you just gathered all of the pictures from the thread and made a slideshow but what would really be good, is a pause button and a button to just go onto the next picture instead of it doing it itself.

I would of entered this thread if I knew people would be making a collab out of it and I think I should be in the next one.

Overall this was OK but you should have picked the ones you really liked and chose those because some of it was a waste of my time but I guess it is OK so there you go.

(Review Request Club)

[CoolJaw: O.S. II-V]

better!

I have to say that it was sad that they just told him what happened and just left him to go on not caring about his feelings and stuff but it was easy to see the newspaper since that it was red and everything else in this is black and white.

I have to say the first detailed picture of Mr. Jaw scared me a bit!His eyes were so eerie but the drawings and sketches DID improve even though I made the review on the first one after you made this one.

The audio was the same but I think you should change it a bit even though it is fitting, it gets repetive but I think you should jumble up all of the comics to one big file and upload it here so we don't have to load it every time.

I think you shouldn't have put stuff on the bathroom even though that's what is on them these days because if that wasnt there, this probably would have been a T rated flash so I think you should think about that in your fourth.

I think you should have put in more background because the bathroom was actually outside by a street and that the bathroom stall was a bus stop and the sinks were cars moving but I guess that is mainly my fault for being retarded.

I can say that I am really liking the series so far and I want to see the whole comics so work a bit on the backgrounds and the drawings a bit more because that picture of Mr. Jaw would have given my little brother nightmares!

Celx-Requin responds:

Yeah the thing is the stuff in the bathroom helps build the atmosphere, and also I didn't want to cop out, and play down to my audience.

I feel if I was targeting a story seriously to adults, it would be condescending to the reader to not depict the more salacious aspects of the world the character is living in.

Thanks,
- Celx