Joshsouza's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[CoolJaw: O.S. II-V]

better!

I have to say that it was sad that they just told him what happened and just left him to go on not caring about his feelings and stuff but it was easy to see the newspaper since that it was red and everything else in this is black and white.

I have to say the first detailed picture of Mr. Jaw scared me a bit!His eyes were so eerie but the drawings and sketches DID improve even though I made the review on the first one after you made this one.

The audio was the same but I think you should change it a bit even though it is fitting, it gets repetive but I think you should jumble up all of the comics to one big file and upload it here so we don't have to load it every time.

I think you shouldn't have put stuff on the bathroom even though that's what is on them these days because if that wasnt there, this probably would have been a T rated flash so I think you should think about that in your fourth.

I think you should have put in more background because the bathroom was actually outside by a street and that the bathroom stall was a bus stop and the sinks were cars moving but I guess that is mainly my fault for being retarded.

I can say that I am really liking the series so far and I want to see the whole comics so work a bit on the backgrounds and the drawings a bit more because that picture of Mr. Jaw would have given my little brother nightmares!

Celx-Requin responds:

Yeah the thing is the stuff in the bathroom helps build the atmosphere, and also I didn't want to cop out, and play down to my audience.

I feel if I was targeting a story seriously to adults, it would be condescending to the reader to not depict the more salacious aspects of the world the character is living in.

Thanks,
- Celx

[CoolJaw: O.S. I-V]

Creepy

I thought it was Ok and kind of original that it was a slideshow but the story was original too.

The art was OK but a bit too sketchy and a bit too dark but it was very fitting for this submission so it was fine for me. Too rough so I think you should round it a bit but the blood things were good too.

I was a bit disappointed that it wasn't really animation but there WAS some animation were the word boxes came out to make it less boring so I guess it's OK but could use a little bit more animation in some places.

Th story was original and very creepy so the story was good too but it was pretty creepy and I think you should make it a bit longer because it saw it in maybe a minute or two but the slideshow buttons worked fine and it is always nice to go back a couple of panels and see the artwork you put in it.

I think it needed a bit more effort into it since it was a slideshow and there was barely any animation but it will be OK just leaving it.

Overall it was pretty good and needed to be a bit longer and maybe get some better sketches into it and improve the artwork and try to fit the text in one place but I say the whole thing was a OK

Celx-Requin responds:

Yes some of the artwork needs work...

Thanks for the review,
& try not to forget the R.R.C tag!
- Celx

[Hurshnenglurper 2009]

Weird

I didnt seem to understand a thing in this video but it was pretty sad how this only got 1 review so here I will start:

The art was OK but needed a few touch-ups and I recommend you don't mix Pixel art with basic art because it makes the whole thing look out of order and weird so you should just stick to pixel art.

The animation needed some work because some times I couldn't understand what the heck was happening. The transition was weird too with the weird happy face. Also, sometimes the animation was too slow. But I guess it was OK in some parts but it DOES need improvement.

I think you chose pretty good audio for this with all of the music fitting in but some of it got pretty annoying but I think you got a great choice of audio for this so good job for that.

That's all that really needs to be said about this but overall I thought it was basic and needed some improvement in the art and animation so I gave it a three which should be a reasonable score for this so guess that's it.

(Review Request Club)

Surn responds:

Yah, I have taken the weirdness too far in the past. Perhaps in the future I should try to submit my shorts in groups of common themes (music, medium, message etc.). Although putting different mediums in the same place might work if used correctly. As for my art and animation I hope that I can get better with practice.

As for some of the music being annoying you haven't heard annoying until you've listened to Jungle Mumble all the way through (I have).

Thanks for rising to the challenge and reviewing this.

[The Mummy's Tomb]

Weird, but a Pretty Unfair Score!

This was a weird but I am happy to say that this is my 300th review! So I am going to force myself to reach the character limit. Well anyways, I liked how the screen looked like it was ACTUALLY an old T.V. I thought that was pretty creative but what DID give you the idea to make this? I am glad that you used ACTUAL art instead of sticks so you get a point for that but I liked how the venom on the snake was animated but I was pretty weirded out at the end. I also smirked and I thought was gonna be a game when I pressed Play and it said "Play Game" after but I found that out quickly in the Description. I thought the sound at the end was pretty annoying but oh well.

So I will start on the art. It was very good and I don't think I found a flaw in the art and the animation was pretty smooth too so you get another point for that. I liked how he stabbed the rat thing in the balls because in movies they don't usually do that. I also thought that the this had an unfair score, I think it deserved at least a 4 or something because I a sure you took a while making it but why so short? Also, I would like to voice act for your next one but I don't know if you already have a guy to help with that. I will PM you later. I thin you should get better sound because the laser sound was pretty bad. Try adobe soundbooth for 30 days and see where that gets you.

I thought it was funny when the Sphinx thing knocked the mummy down. (Correct me if I got the name wrong) but why didn;t the mummy like kill the stupid guy. I was waiting for that to happen but Oh well I guess. But why did the bats just keep following the mummy around and I don't know how a bat can eat a snake but oh well for that too I guess. You should also work on making it a little bit longer even though it took you a while to make this, you should set some goals for your next one and plan it out and stuff. What is going to go here and what is going to there and gather up some helpful tools or voice acting to make it more beefier.

I thought the whole thing was odd and random but I have to say that it was original and you probably put in a lot of effort into it too. When i saw the GIF image I thought it was gonna be mostly about rats but it WAS weird how you put a rat's head on a body, that was wrong. You may as well put a human's head on a rat body! (lol just joking) Try to do your best and practice at animation more even though it was good animation. Practice makes perfect even though you may get crazy doing it. The whole thing didn't get much attention out of me because it was actually pretty boring really. You should check it before you publish it and think: "Are my viewers going to enjoy this?"

Comparing this to other movies on NG, this is pretty good and happy that this is the best score that you have gotten on any off your flash and I think you should keep trying until you actually get a good score or even better! A Daily award! Usually this is the type of movies that get there but I am clueless on how this got a bad score. It might have been a Zero-Bomber or something but that kinda sucks to see this flash go to waste. I have got about 950 characters to go so here is the next thing I will be talking about: Audio

The music you picked was pretty good and I don't think this needed voice acting so good call for that. The sound at the end was PRETTY annoying and I think the End screen was too long and annoying. I I was just watching the whole thing to see if there was something at the end or something.

Well now I will give you the overall score:

Art 10/10
Originality 10/10
Concept 10/10
Audio 8/10
Effort 10/10
Animation 10/10
Added Effects 10/10

I wouldn't really recommend that much because it was pretty boring but I think you should work on length, the sounds, and you could try improving your art a little bit even though it is fine but other than that, you got a pretty good submission and I will help out with the score a bit to help you so good day to you and I hope that you enjoyed my Character Limit review. Good night.

{Review Request Club) (Took me a while to write)

Voodoo responds:

Woah, you wrote a book on my flash haha.

I agree with almost all of your points...as I finished it, I was thinking to myself "WOW! This is boring as shit!". But it was really just practice as you said before.

I'm glad you thought it deserved more recognition, but hey, I'm not going to cry if i don't get a little pixel trophy, right?

I also thought the end was annoying, but i was trying to use the whole song, and you really can't take the plot much further in that amount of time.

This is the kind of review I really wanted. Some in depth criticism. You da man

[A Newgrounds Christmas]

Loved It!

Couldn't resist reviewing this but this was pretty awesome! I liked the art I think you drew all of them pretty good but I think Pico and all of the originals didn't look like the way Tom draws them but what the heck, it was Awesome! It was a nice feature to put Bitey and Blockhead in but I didn't notice that Bitey and Blockhead was playing tennis with the Turtle until I watched it two times!

What was that thing on Tom's eye though? It was pretty funny when the guy from your Larry series (That bad guy, I forgot what his name was!) was having this fight with Mastermind I thought that was funny and Larry with that other Ice Thing (I don't look at every series on Newgrounds!) It was also nice that you put in the photo from here on the art Forum but when my Mom sees the Penicorn on my Desktop background, she will kill me! Oh well, I used that picture as the desktop background on my PC.

I have a question, how do you make a lot of cool crap in less than a month! I mean, the Kill Car didn't come out that long ago plus with your Larry series and yes, I am the same person who reviewed your Larry video and responded it and I hope you are reading this right now because sooner or later, this place will be spammed up with crappy reviews but I will find a way to show you!

I thought it was amazing that you only had two Voice Actors, I mean, how can they do that many voices! Well, I am sure The Swain only did the Mastermind and Blockhead voices but other than that, the voice actors were great! I am pretty sure you worked hard into making this so I am actually spending my time and effort into this REVIEW since I don't have flash.(yet)

I think it's sad that I am probably younger than all of the reviewers below and I am actually doing better than the older people! Just remind people to actually look at the Reviewing rules on your next submission because it is pretty sad having bad reviews on a good submission. Well anyways, I think this Flash was good in every way because it reminded me to look at the series that you included in it even though it was short.

Well overall, I thought it was pretty creative to put a bunch of NG characters into one flash because no one really does that. I thought the voice acting was terrific! But also, you need to work on drawing salad fingers a little bit more. I mean coloring it right because it kind of looked wrong. So the art was pretty awesome! The sounds were good too and I will give credit to ZStriefel for that. The animation was good too and a nice way to end the year. Keep making Flash Jazza! You have some true talent! i will look forward to the next Larry Episode that you are probably working on.

I hope you enjoyed the review!

-Joshsouza

Jazza responds:

who a review lke this deserves a paragraph by paragraph response! lol.

pico didnt look the same but thats ok, theres a million different versions of pico on newgrounds anyways and people are used to different takes on him so, yeah.

the bad guys = the overlord, thats his name, and the dude larry was talking to was dirge from the xombie series. go watch it man, awesome series. lol we might wanna censor the penicorn on your comp tho.

it's pretty exciting to be back in the flash zone, and submitting, i'm grateful that my stuffs getting a decent response, but its not about me its about you guys!!! i'm here to entertain you so if i'm doing it i'm happy :)

i gotta admit your reviews are more like conversations haha, but it's great. you cover a lot. i suppose it'll happen again in my next submission! :P

i actually had more voice actors. tom fulp, johnny utah and geoff edwards were a few not listed, simply cos theyre not in my co-authors options box. i would if i could.

thanks for all the compliments man i appreciate it. as for me missing salad fingers style, i totally know what you mean. i suppose though when trying to imitate the artistic style of about 30 different authors your bound to get one or two wrong lol.

enjoyed your review!

[The Sketch Collab 2009]

Terrific!

The sketches were amazing and they were entertaining and fun to watch! I thought when I draw that face in the preloader when it played the intro, I thought it was the whole thing and I was about to give it a two until I pressed the play button then I saw true talent in lots of users and I was glad that they were original and random and their atristic skills for each one.

I was going to point out a few of my favorite ones and I thought about it and I will say that every one them was unique in a special so they were ll my favorites but I think some of the creators should work on their art but I was sad that there were no sounds but good music that you picked! I thought this was going to be like Luis' only a page of each art with no animation but REALLY REALLY good artwork.

I liked this a lot because first, I love art and animation, actually having a collab on Newgrounds(Because there aren't much submittted often anymore) So overall, I think you need voice acting in the next Collaboration you organize So keep it up!

{Review Request Club}

Timsplosion responds:

Well, voice acting hasn't really been involved in the Sketch Collabs. It doesn't really seem to fit, and it's awkward working out how to quieten the music during those bits, which would be over shadowing both the work of the musician, and the other animators. But thanks for the feedback! :)

[60 Seconds of Awesome]

Interesting Cconcept

Yes I have seen clips in 30 seconds and 50 seconds but this one was pretty entertaining and I watched it again! It was filled with weird puns that made it entertaining but I didn't like the songs you picked to go with it. Why didn't you use any voice acting at all because It is weird listening to music while watching to a movie with no Voice Acting but at least you had sound at all or else this would have been crap.

Did I see this on the front page because I thought I did! Oh well, this was pretty good and I liked the jokes you used. They made me laugh but I don't think you put much effort into this considering that it is only 60 seconds but who knows? It had pretty decent artwork too so you get 7 for that but I enjoyed the concept the most that made it interesting because it is like telling a story that is only 10 seconds long and that is pretty creative and that is a skill that most people probably don't have except that woman who talks the fastest for a world record.

Sorry that this review isn't that long because I don'y want to spend 20 minutes writing reviews all day and since this was a short flash but overall, I think you should get a mic or something for voice acting and other things or even ask OTHER people for voice acting but yet again, they could only make audio that is 10 seconds long but anyways, here is the overall score

Art 8/10
Concept 9/10
Audio 6/10
Originality 10/10

You should make a sequel with 120 seconds of awesome so you can have 12 clips in it but I guess this was pretty good and decent so you have my word!

{Review Request Club}

Emrox responds:

120 seconds of pure awesome... that's a good idea...

BTW: No, this was not front paged (sniff, sniff)